Prelim feedback

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TEACHERS FEEDBACK 

 WWW: The song comes across as incredibly heartfelt and passionate which aligns with the initial sombre image of the unsure girl in bed struggling to bring herself to join her friends. You’ve taken a range of shots from varying angles and spread them effectively, creating quite a happy tonal shift from the beginning. Your use of the perspective shot in the beginning gives an interesting point of view to the beginning of your video which I believe a viewer can align with.


Next Steps: Whilst I believe the song is a powerful choice, consider the lack of pace change or uplifting tone which would match with the clips used throughout most of the video. The song continues to sound quite sad, whilst the clips reflect an uplifting and happy tone. Make your protagonist far more obvious. Because of the filters and large group shots it becomes difficult to recognise who the outright protagonist is of the video: use your ensemble cast to build this protagonist up



MY FEEDBACK 


WWW:

- One thing that went well is I used different shots.

- I think i executed the message well.


NEXT STEPS: 

- Putting the videos better and make the main character more visible so people know who it is.

- filming more parts for the video and matching up with the song. 



What I have learnt :

-To find a better song that can fit with the video properly 

-To add more locations and shots 

-Organising my clips properly 


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